J24: Feedback
Todays feedback session returned the following outline:
Scene 1 – Boot Camp by: A.
Takes Aways:
- Ensure Aaron (and teams’) bodily position effectively engage the crowd.
- Ensure ranks are clearly establish via two sets of dialogue: Aaron to Andrew; Aaron to Antonio & Issa.
- When running, mime a circle, a song, exhaustion, etc. (AND – as an extension of #1) keep the audience in mind.
- Andrew must be wearing his jacket.
Transition – Sounds of battle, light down, flickering.
Scene 2 – Death by: I.
- Music?
- Ensure that the quotes used from the poems are spread out. i.e. Antonio will share his quote at the end of Scene 2; Aaron will share his in Scene 3; Andrew will share his in Scene 4.
- Ensure Andrew’s distance is at a maximum from the group.
Transition – Other poems, and Aaron freshens up.
Scene 3 – Funeral by. Aa.
- Use a freeze frame during conflict, instead of moving off stage.
- The funeral scene should have a faster clip than the death scene, when dealing with the jacket. Crisp.
Transition – Light funeral music (perhaps military funeral), and Andrew Monologue
- Light bar music
- Acknowledging the ghost via comedy: empty shot-glass, moved glass, etc.
Scene 4 – Reunion by. A.